CI Feedback- Draft 1

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Www-Good overview of the product/technology. Some god embedded quotes

ebi- book references! More link to other aspect of digital media and the issues/debates they raise.

What I will do – look at more issues in regards to privacy and use that in my work also look for more problems that may have occurred.

9 book quotes have been added

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www-well used/relevant quotes and related them to google glass

ebi- read over the work, some sentence don’t make sense

What I will do – I will re-read my all my work and proof check it more effectively

i have chnaged the first quote and added 9 book quotes from 9 different books

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www-good use of institution and representation and use of embedded quotes.

ebi- need to include theories ( representation , audience)

What I will do – I will look t theory in terms of representation , audience and even status

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www- very detailed knowledge on subject area

ebi- grammer can be improved in places

What I will do - I will re-read my all my work and proof check it more effectively

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www- found one theory

ebi- try to include more

What I will do – use more theory and ensure that more than one is implemented.